读后续写专练
文章分析和写作指导
1. 主旨大意。这篇文章是以第一人称进行描写的，讲述的是一次全家团聚，在海边玩，哥哥姐姐们在做饭，年龄小的孩子在游泳，因为“我”不会游泳，当“我”看到一艘渔船的时候产生兴趣，因此就独自驾驶这条船上在海中玩，
2. 续写思路。文章最后提到，在海中，“我”并不能很好的操控这条船。第一段段首指导语说的是“我”的船慢慢的飘向深海，第二段段首语说的是当“我”醒过来，“我”躺在床上。根据第二段段首句反推第一段内容，在第一段中，“我”应该没有控制住渔船，落水了，并且失去意识。第二段当“我”醒过来，“我”才知道“我”落水后的情况，有人救了“我”，而且把“我”送去医院。这次意外是一个教训，这种冒险可不能再轻易尝试了。
3. 写作风格。在原文中并没有出现对话，因此，建议在续写时不要进行对话描写。尝试使用动词、形容词、副词、定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句、强调句、非谓语动词以及被动语态来刻画人物的语言、动作、心理、神态以及环境氛围。注意运用恰当的代词、衔接词描写文章的情节递进。
重点词汇：
hence adv.因此 nevertheless adv.然而 seize v.抓住
desperation n.绝望 accompany v.陪伴 unconscious adj.无意识的 adventure n.冒险
重点短语：
1. get rid of 摆脱掉
2. attract one’s attention 吸引...的注意
3. a sense of desperation 绝望感
4. as a matter of fact 实际上
5. make up one’s mind 决定
6. cherish life 珍惜生命
重点句型：
1. so...that... 结果状语从句的倒装结构。
2.It be extremely evident that... that引导的主语从句。
3It be ...that... 强调句
My boat was gradually pilled towards the deeper part.So dangerous was the situation that it was impossible for me to get rid of the risk without others’ help.(描写“我”在海中所面临的危险情况。)Hence,I shouted loudly in order to attract my siblings’ attention.（面对危险，“我”大喊寻求救援。）Nevertheless,it was extremely evident that they didn’t hear me.What’s worse,a big wave came and threw me from the boat.(“我”的“报警”没有效，更糟糕的是，一个大浪打来“我”落水了。)I was seized by a strong sense of desperation,struggling in the water,waving my hands with all my strength.（落水后，“我”在水中拼命挣扎）After a while ,I began to sink and lost my thought.（结果“我”开始失去意识）
When I came to life,I was lying in a bed.I was accompanied by my parents and siblings in the hospital.（“我”的家人陪着我，大家都很关心我的情况。）As a matter of fact,it was my brother that saw and saved me from the sea.(醒来后“我”才知道是我哥哥救了我。)I was unconscious when I was rescued.They immediately sent me to the hospital.（“我”被救后又被送去医院。进一步描写前段的情节，与上文呼应。）Feeling fortunate,I made up my mind to cherish life and not to try such adventure again.(“我”从中吸取经验教训。)Mother said we would have a celebration for another life given to me.I told them the celebration would never be held at the beach.（文章最后一个圆满的结局。）
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